Pokka Corporation Singapore Pte Ltd
No.4 Benoi Crescent
Singapore 629970
Dear Sir/Madam,
Re: Internship Application
I am Tan Seow Peng, an undergraduate student majoring in Food Science and Technology in National University of Singapore. I am writing to apply for an internship placement in the Pokka Corporation. A CV is enclosed with this document.
I have a strong interest in food science and research. Thus, I am very eager to become an intern and participate in the research and development of beverages in Pokka Corporation. As Pokka Corporation has been a successful leader in the creation of new products such as the Jasmine Green Tea, I believe that this internship will allow me to prepare me for a career in food science and offer me opportunities to learn about Pokka Corporation.
To satisfy the ever-changing needs of taste and nutrition, the food science industry is capricious in nature, promising as much challenges as rewards. I feel that I can overcome such obstacles based on my experience. For each of the past three semesters, I handled six modules, more than the usual five modules, while maintaining my CAP above 4.0. I believe that this demonstrates my resilience and determination to excel under stress. Consequently, this has honed my time management skills. I am confident that I will be able to work efficiently as an intern with Pokka Corporation.
As much as resolve is required to meet the ever-changing needs of the people, the food industry also values innovation. I have been actively contributing new, feasible ideas in my project groups and extra-curricular activities. In the Mazarin Project, I came up with the idea of the gardening by students in school and incorporated the concept of bonding among students, in addition to environmental awareness. This project was successful and well-received by both students and teachers. With this experience, I believe I can take up the challenge of brainstorming for new ideas and transforming them into reality. I also desire to try out new areas of research and make significant contributions to the company during my internship. Thus, if I am granted an internship placement, I will be very committed to the research and strive to perform well and produce results.
I will be able to take up internship from May 2011 to July 2011. I hope that you will look favorably at my application and I look forward to hearing from you.
Yours Sincerely,
Tan Seow Peng
Some comments:
ReplyDelete-Second paragraph: You can omit the 'me' after the word prepare in the following line: 'will allow me to prepare me'.
-The newly added example from the Mazarin Program does show the employer that you can be innovative and creative.
-You can try to elaborate on what challenges you might face as an intern and link your skills to those challenges.
-Element of persuasion is evident as you have given well substantiated points on how you can contribute to the company.
-Again, try to include the position requirements of the internship if possible.
Hi Seow Peng,
ReplyDeleteHere are some suggestions.
In the first paragraph, the line 'in the Pokka Corporation' can be ommitted. Rather than 'A CV', you can put 'My curriculum vitae'.
Third paragraph looks good. For the fourth paragraph, swap the 'have been actively' to 'have actively been'. The word 'the' can be omitted in 'idea of the gardening'. That sentence itself is quite long so rearranging it might be better 'and incorporated the concept of student bonding while instilling environmental awareness'. In the last line, the double usage of 'and' will make the sentence structure weird. Hence, you can choose to omit 'and produce results'.
Other than what Yijie and I said, your internship application letter looks good. There has been a good use of opening sentences for some of the paragraphs that display your flair and passion for food science. Great job. :)